Substantive Education

March 4, 2010

Blood on the Streets: Northern Ireland by Caleb Bagdanov

The following paper was written by one of my sons in 2008. He was a senior in high school at the time.    I’m putting it up here as an example of a research paper for my students, and their parents.   There is an annotated Bibliography on the end, it should provide examples of most things that need to be sited in a Bib.  It’s also a good summary of the conflicts over the past 50 years (or 400 years) in Ireland.  Let me know if it was helpful.

The people of Northern Ireland have endured a bloody and brutal conflict for centuries caused by religious, cultural and political prejudices. The Troubles, as the conflict is known in Ireland, has heightened the division between two different peoples, Catholics and Protestants. So, how is compromise found with the blood of over 3500 dead staining the streets and hearts of Northern Ireland? Where is peace in a community so divided? Is there a solution in a land where bigotry and hate dominate the political landscape? The heartbreaking complexity of the Northern Irish conflict is summed up in this account by Seamus Heaney in a lecture when he received the Nobel Prize for literature in 1995:

“One of the most harrowing moments in the whole history of the harrowing of the heart in Northern Ireland came when a minibus full of workers being driven home one January evening in 1976 was held up by armed and masked men and the occupants of the van ordered at gunpoint to line up at the side of the road. Then one of the masked executioners said to them, “Any Catholics among you, step out here”. As it happened, this particular group, with one exception, were all Protestants, so the presumption must have been that the masked men were Protestant paramilitaries about to carry out a tit-for-tat sectarian killing of the Catholic as the odd man out, the one who would have been presumed to be in sympathy with the IRA and all its actions. It was a terrible moment for him, caught between dread and witness, but he did make a motion to step forward. Then, the story goes, in that split second of decision, and in the relative cover of the winter evening darkness, he felt the hand of the Protestant worker next to him take his hand and squeeze it in a signal that said no, don’t move, we’ll not betray you, nobody need know what faith or party you belong to. All in vain, however, for the man stepped out of the line; but instead of finding a gun at his temple, he was thrown backward and away as the gunmen opened fire on those remaining in the line, for these were not Protestant terrorists, but members, presumably, of the Provisional IRA.” (more…)

Writing a research paper, an example. Blood on the Streets: Northern Ireland

Filed under: Uncategorized — kbagdanov @ 8:09 pm

The following paper was written by my son Caleb when he was a Senior in High School.  I’m posting it because some of my student’s (and their parents) wanted an example of a research essay.  Just a note, when I moved it over from my documents, it messed with the layout some and I’ve chosen not to go back and re-space things.

This paper involved a great deal of research before the writing began. but the actual writing was done in a few days.  Here are some things students should be aware of.  This was a historical paper so the pointers I will give below are specific to that genre.

  • Give a strong opening.
  • Vary sentence structure.
  • Pay attention to word choices choosing concise, clear words.
  • Avoid starting sentences with ‘This’ which is weak, instead restate what you are referring back to in a strong way.
  • Make sure when you use pronouns, that it is clear what they refer back to.
  • Provide more than one point of view, or examine several sides of the issue.
  • Place your topic in historical context…what led up to the events.
  • Stick to one cohesive idea within each paragraph and provide transitions to the next.
  • Provide  analysis and original thinking.
  • Tie your ending into your intro. to provide continuity.
  • Proofread your paper for grammatical and spelling errors
  • Have someone else proofread your paper and provide feedback, not just on making corrections, but on anything that is unclear.
  • The presentation of facts and ideas should flow in a logical sequence.
  • Explain or define unfamiliar vocabulary or references.

To view the paper click here.

Essay Writing class update.

Filed under: Family stuff,Friday classes,writing — kbagdanov @ 7:49 pm
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My Essay writing class has been working on writing explications. For the first few assignments students were free to choose which pieces their would explicate.  This week they were to work on either Psalm 1, or a poem called ‘Peace Wall’.  If you are choosing to use Peace Wall you will probably need to google and get some basics about the conflict in Northern Ireland as that provides the background for the poem.  Apologies, due to illness this wasn’t up earlier in the week.

Peace Wall  by Tim Bagdanov

Hail Mary - where a passing bus

swirls gutter leaves to air;

and where shards of brick and glass

are spread over gravel like un-

answered prayers.  Here,

one avoids windows by night

and herds kids to bed

through bleating sirens.

Full of Grace - over there

is a park where no children

play, spine of cement

and barbed wire down the center.

Here, rosary beads are never

innocuous; they scream and wriggle

out prayers of their own.  Here,

it is never known when Peace

will be shattered with a yell

and the yellow stare

of a tiger.

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